This is a story about Mr. and Mrs. Smart and the dynamics of their relationship. Mr. Smart is an undertaker and he is called out on a snowy night to retrieve a body. Before he leaves he sees a text on his wife's phone that makes him suspect her of being unfaithful. Before his wife can explain anything to him, he is in a fatal car accident.
I think that this story is very well written overall. I enjoyed the tension that built between the two. I thought it was very realistic and insightful. The reactions and suspicions of Mr. Smith were well done, I thought, as were the brief bits we got of his wife. The dynamics of their relationship seemed very subtly exact and real to me. My favorite line was the description of the black text on the bright cell phone screen. It was a clear image, but the blackness of the text really showed how Mr. Smith felt about it.
In the first section, the flow of time is a little unclear and hard to follow. The transition from present to past and back needs cleared up, I thought. Also, I'd number the first section the same way you did the second. Finally, there were a couple spots where you told us that a character responded irritably or something similar. I thought that the action itself was sufficient to get that point across.
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