The story starts with Dean Overstreet, who is an old man tryin g to remember his life's story by writing it down. He worked as a servant for the Huxley family and formed a bond with their son Adrian. Dean recalls a night when he had a conversation with Adrian and calls the memory his one grace in life. Adrian and his father had been fighting about what Adrian was to do with his life, and Adrian was thinking about suicide. The scene seems to show Adrian's transition from boyhood to manhood, and Dean is humbly grateful to have been a part of it.
I really like the characters you've created, especially Dean and Adrian. Adrian's reminiscence on the front lawn was well imagined and seemed real. I also liked the dynamic between these two characters. Adrian was in charge by default even though Dean is older, but Adrian is smart enough to show Dean the respect he deserves.
I'm not sure what the framework at the beginning is doing at the end of the story. We get the setup of Dean being old and starting to lose his memory, that's why he's recalling this particular story, but other than that it doesn't do much for the story as a whole. It seems like just a means by which to get the story started, and if that's all it is then I'm not sure it's necessary. I like it though, and if it was used in the story more I think it should stay.
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